Survey Says….what…about hooking readers?

In preparation for a couple of workshops I will be teaching in 2010 on how to strengthen the opening of a novel (Better Beginnings), I am conducting an informal survey here at blog de Ramona. Here is the question:

– How much time are you, the reader, willing to give an author to capture your attention? – 

A.   ONE LINE. If the first line doesn’t grab me, it’s going right back on the shelf.

B.   ONE PARAGRAPH. I’ll read a half page or so before giving up or going forward.

C.   ONE CHAPTER. Come on, every book deserves at least one chapter from a reader.

D.   THREE CHAPTERS. If the premise/set up seems promising, I’ll give it a sporting chance to really grab me.

E.   HALF THE BOOK. If I’m hooked at the start, but find myself yawning in the great wasteland of Act II, I’ve fought the good fight for the author.

F.   THE WHOLE THING. If I am drawn in at the beginning, I read to the end, whether it is brilliant or bitter.

G.   OTHER.  (You’ll have to provide your own clarifiying sentence, because I think I covered all the viable possibilities in A-F, but you never know.)

To “vote,” please post A, B, C, D, E, F or G in a comment, and add whatever thoughts, ideas, or suggestions you’d like. If there’s a book that has a really great hook that you’d care to mention, please do so.

If you prefer to remain anonymous, email your comment to me at ramonadef@yahoo.com and I will add your thoughts to the final count.

I’ll tally up responses and report on it later. Vote once and…that’s all.

Thanks for playing!

Ramona

MAAF Update

 

Mid Atlantic Arts Foundation Launches New Registry of Fellowship Artists – November 25, 2009

 

The MAAF is pleased to announce the launch of a new, on-line registry of artist fellowship winners from Delaware, District of Columbia, Maryland, New Jersey, Pennsylvania, U.S. Virgin Islands, Virginia, and West Virginia. The service, which is free to both artists and public users, features artist profiles, work samples across all disciplines, online exhibitions, and a technical assistance section.

As a grantee from both Delaware and Pennsylvania, I get a page. Yay! Here it is:

http://registry.midatlanticarts.org/portfolio.cfm?id=126

 

Liars and Tablecloths

A couple of Mondays ago, I wrote a short story.  I’m not usually very creative on Mondays, as it’s my day to clear up weekend debris and take care of business gunk like checking on submissions or printing invoices. Mundane, but necessary.

But that Monday, while dressing the kitchen table with one of my beloved vintage tablecloths, I was thinking about an exercise we’d done back in June at Rosemont College’s short story retreat. The exercise was on unreliable narrators. It was lots of fun, because the author basically tells a lot of lies, only it’s done from the mouth of a character, so it can’t be held against you. I don’t get to tell a lot of lies in my life, esp. on a Monday when I’m unfolding tablecloths, so the idea of fibbing on purpose, with no consequences, was appealing. Like legalized naughtiness.

The challenge of the unreliable narrator in fiction is that, in their own minds, the character is not lying. They’re telling the truth from their own, self-serving perspective. If done correctly, every sentence, individually, is completely factual. Put together, however, the sum of all of the sentences is a great big whopper.

I was thinking about how much I had enjoyed that legalized lying, when suddenly, a line came to me. An opening line:

“When my sister finally left home, I was so glad.”

I don’t know where the line came from, but I liked it. I listened to it in my head again, and it sounded like a girl said it. A youngish girl, but not a little girl. A teenager, with an older teenage sister. I listened again, and the older sister—the one who finally left home—sounded like her name was Evie.  So the line changed to:

“When my sister Evie finally left home, I was so glad.”

I knew all of that in a minute or two, and by the time I had dressed the table and emptied the dishwasher and put a load of laundry in, I’d heard in my head that Evie had left home with a boy—or maybe two boys?– and it was not a pleasant trip. But it wasn’t horrendous. I don’t write stories where horrendous things happen to older sisters. Which meant it was worse than no fun and less than something actually criminal.

I also knew that Evie’s little sister wasn’t glad at all that Evie had left home, because little sis was an unreliable narrator. I just wasn’t sure–yet–why Evie had left home, or why little sis needed to pretend to be glad about it. But I was sure that little sis would explain it to me.

And that was how my story called “Evie” was born.

No. That’s not right. “Evie” wasn’t born yet, because Evie was still in my head. It’s more accurate to say that that’s how I got pregnant with the story of “Evie.” For the story to be properly born meant I had to record it.

It’s weird how writers become pregnant with stories, as opposed to how we become pregnant with children. (I don’t want to take this analogy much farther, because then I might do something dopey like try to compare rough drafts with stretch marks.) I confess that, most of the time, I get my story ideas the old-fashioned way: I steal them from my family.

But sometimes the quirky happens, and it’s a gift. You get hit with a line out of the blue and two or three minutes later, that embryo (sorry, had to do it a little) is growing conflicts and themes and scenery.

It rarely happens when I’m trying to do it. When I’m actively trying to pop out a story—like when I read about a literary contest and the theme is “blue skies” or “water balloons”–I instantly become intellectually barren and can’t think of a single line that has the remotest connection to blue skies or water balloons. Which might be good because those sound like two terribly dull topics.

But Evie totally intrigued me.

The seed came from recalling the exercise. I suppose I wanted to relive that pleasurably experience, so I subconsciously gave myself a new assignment. The only other option is that creativity molecules flew up from the tablecloth, lodged themselves in my brain and sent me into a tizzy. But I don’t think so.

I blew off the housework (such a hardship) and sat at my dining room table with one of the fat notebooks that I now use for short stories. I wrote in longhand for a several hours, non-stop, until I had full draft recorded. I have learned that when this kind of story pregnancy happens, the best thing to do is to record it spontaneously, without any further planning or thought or overworking. Like Mother Nature intended.

It didn’t come out quite in line with my original spare vision, but it was pretty darn close. The next day, as is my habit, I transcribed it to computer. It was 17 manuscript pages. I whittled it down to 13– 4000 words plus change. Last night, I emailed it to my critique group for my November submission. In a couple of weeks, I’ll find out what they think of “Evie.”

That’s how it happened, how it may happen again. Hopefully.

I have an summary line about some good things being planned and others being unplanned and how to recognize the value of either, or both, but it’s very close to that dopey area with the stretch marks/rough draft comparison, so I’ll spare you having to read it.

Instead I’ll say to remind me, someday, to tell you about my tablecloth collection. It’s pretty neat.

A Writers’ Getaway Weekend

Shhh.

I am typing very quietly because, on the other side of my hotel suite is a writer working diligently on her novel. A minute ago, so was I. Honest. But I am taking a short break to write my Sunday night blog post.

This week’s topic: A Writers’ Getaway Weekend.

I should amend that to A Successful Writers’ Getaway Weekend. I’ve had a few of the other kind, where I booked a hotel room for a good rate during the offseason and packed up my laptop and work notes and headed out full of piss and vinegar, determined to get 50 new pages written in one weekend.

Yes, 50 new pages. Did I ever actually write that many? No. Not even close.

Here’s why. In the past, my getaway destination was Lancaster, PA, which is close and affordable, and a very nice place that’s kind of a city and kind of a town. The really special thing about Lancaster is the presence of the Amish. I had this idea that the ambiance of hard work and clean living would seep into my consciousness. The Amish’ steadfast work ethic would inspire me to hole up in my room and write without stopping.

But here’s the thing about the Amish. They don’t just toil the fields and ride around in buggies. They bake pies and grow vegetables and sell them at farmers markets; they sew quilts and make handmade furniture that fill local antique and craft shops; they cook scrumptious foods and serve them family style in restaurants.  Somehow, in Lancaster, my writer’s weekend always turned into me stomping my work ethic into the ground while I stuffed my face and power shopped.

Not this time. Why? Because this time, I changed locations, and I brought along another writer.

For years (literally), my writer friend Joanne and I said what so many writers say, “Wouldn’t it be great to go away for a weekend sometime and just write.” You know, one of those things you say and never do. But two weeks ago, a newly renovated hotel in Rehoboth Beach emailed me a “shopper’s weekend” special, near the beach, in a suite, for a price that will never happen again. It seemed like an ironic omen to turn the shopper’s weekend into a writing one.

So here we are. Okay, sure, we did a little shopping on the way in, and of course we  had to eat, and there may have been a couple of walks in the sand, but there is also a chapter in my novel that is no longer a long boring info dump, and I rewrote some scenes that were full of clutter, and I figured out how to make my protagonist sound less like a talking head while explaining the history of her culture.  

Why did I get all of this done this time, when I couldn’t when I was alone? Simple. I may be willing to distract myself, but I refuse to distract another writer who is working.  Ergo, I work, too. The more she writes, the more I write.

So here is a recipe for a Successful Writers’ Getaway Weekend, for two:

1. Drive at least one hour to reach your destination. The drive gives you time to brainstorm and gets your creativity in gear.

2. If possible, get a suite. I’m working in the bedroom, she’s in the sitting area. There’s a partition that we can close for more privacy.

3. Bring snacks. Wine. Soft drinks, candy, popcorn. Hard work requires sustenance. Goals deserve rewards.

4.  Set realistic goals. Was that 50 new pages ever going to happen, in any location? No. But a couple of revised chapters, and some reworked problem scenes, and 20 new pages over a two day period is not bad. I set a small goal for each period and didn’t stop until I had reached it.

5. Plan the day in increments. Work for a couple of hours, break for lunch. Work in afternoon. Break for dinner. Repeat as necessary. 

6. Leave the room to eat and take walks. During these breaks, take turns discussing your work.  Talk about what you’ve accomplished so far, and your next goal. Keep your head in your story.

7. Avoid the Amish.

There is it, as simple and sweet as shoo-fly pie. Enjoy!

 Ramona

PS – Here’s where you can find Joanne, but don’t disturb her now; she’s busy writing:

 www.jmreinbold.com

http://writtenremains.blogspot.com

See that pretty fleur-de-lis?

As I am the daughter of a cowboy, it’s a bit of a chuckle that my first proper blog post will be about branding.

By that, I don’t mean applying a hot iron to my cool but tough writerly hide. Branding is a marketing term for creating a connection between artist and audience. It can be visual (a logo), physical (matching covers in a book series) or perceptual (Agatha Christie, queen of mystery authors.)

All of that is good info for self-promotion and platform building, but I am a little all over the place artistically. I wanted an esoteric symbol, an image that would link me to my work, but wouldn’t box me into one style or genre.

 Also, I wanted something distinctive for my letterhead and business cards.

It took me about 10 seconds to find a fitting artistic symbol, not because I am lazy or easy to please, but because I am lucky. Ask me about myself and my work, and some of the first words out of my mouth will be “French,” “Louisiana,” “family stories,” and “Cajun country.”

Hence the fleur-de-lis.

A year ago, Louisiana formally adopted the “lily flower” as an official symbol of the state. After Katrina, it was an emblem of grassroots support for hope and recovery in New Orleans. The fleur-de-lis also appears on the official flag of Acadiana. Historically, it is a symbol of heraldry, first used by King Clovis I of France, who embraced the concept of the divine right of kings.

All of which matches well with me. I like flowers. I am French. My Acadian ancestors survived the Grand Derangement from Canada to Louisiana. I survived hurricanes in my childhood. I love New Orleans. I am not blessed with royal blood, but I do like to think I have divine right over my writing.

Plus, it’s awfully pretty, isn’t it?



DDOA Introduces Artist Pages

The Delaware Division of the Arts unveiled its new artist pages today. Take a look!

Introduction to all Fellowship Artists:

http://www.artsdel.org/information/iafrecipients/default.shtml

My Page:

http://www.artsdel.org/information/iafrecipients/long.shtml

Congratulations to the DDOA–this looks fantastic!

Hello world!

Bonjour and Hello!

Please wander around, poke and prod, leave a message, come back again soon.

Ramona